Beginning rewrite

So the beginning of chapter one needed a lot of work, but I think I finally figured it out but, I would love some critiques for further preperations

Chapter 1

Light filled the room with early morning sun. Laying in bed, Lucifer Night wiped his face. Shifting to his side, he looked at the clock on his dresser; quarter of seven. He had to be in class at eight. Not wanting to, he forced himself to sit upright on his small bed.

Lucifer rummaged through the pile of cloths at the end of the bed. With little variety he picked a pair of black pants and his favorite shirt. Go to your grave was clearly etched across his chest, with a long forgotten cracked gravestone with a  graying skull on it directly under it.

Lucifer turned around, scanning his room for his wallet and chain. Pulling them from the pants he wore the night before he was ready for school.

Passing his electric guitar and amp, he double checked that both were unplugged. The old wiring was known for sparking and a fire was the last thing that he needed.

On his way out the front he paused outside his mothers door. Quietly asleep with a bucket by the bed, a puddle drying and rusting around the base. Too tired to be grossed out, he just shook his head and grabbed his keys to his black Volkswagen.

Sitting in his car, he was once again, alone and with one swift click death metal blasted through the speakers into his ears, sending deep into his own world, engulfed in bitter angst.
Driving through the small town took little time, despite living in the last apartment before the next town. The road was clear of passing cars, leaving his street quiet and empty.

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