Edits for 13th Day

This part seems really awkward to me, any suggestions?


“On her thirteenth day, Marietta picked up her books eagerly, anticipating another event less lunch with Lucifer. She was the first ready to leave, and easily squeezed past everyone. Her usual spot in the corner near the window had a few perks; other than having something to focus on when she finished her work early and waited for her classmates to catch up.

Half the day had passed and Marietta was pleased to see that lunch was next and she would be able to track down Lucifer. Every chance she got, she would spend time just listening to him as he attempted to keep his cold mask on, while answering her questions. At first, she felt intimidated by him but, the more they talked the less scary he was and the more she wanted to know.”

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