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ReWorking

I just rewrote and slightly changed this part and would love some feedback.     Lily let her thoughts wander to Jade, forgetting to watch her step in doing so and tripped over her own feet and crashed against Wolf … Continue reading

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Play Him Like A Fool Lily

One afternoon Jade asked Lily why she didn’t try to learn in class. Lily had simply replied, “I just don’t care.” He seemed surprised with her response and even a little concerned. “What would you do if you  were attacked?” … Continue reading

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Tension on the roof

Its still really rough, I haven’t edited this far into my book but I love this part.       When both Wolf Vein and Lily both were comfortable leaning next to her window, Lily started the conversation. “Stop staring … Continue reading

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Sister Teasing

I’m trying to build the relationship between Lily and her sister rather than tell it. I would love some opinions on how I am doing.     Plopping herself on her queen size bed, she pulled out her phone and … Continue reading

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When stopping at a gas station screws you

The usual girl was working the counter. Her familiar face was pleasant but the empty look in her eyes made her difficult to read. Lily stood at the counter with her potatoes chips and coke. Is she always that pale? … Continue reading

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Lost on Editing?

This is a part of my manuscript that I have done a lot of work on and it still feel like it doesn’t flow well. Any ideas on how I can smooth it out more? The dark images flooded in, … Continue reading

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Sisters Bond

After fighting her way past Luke, Lily met her sister in her truck. She paused and looked at Betty before starting the truck. “What?” Fingers tightened around the hot steering wheel as Lily turned forward, regretting gaining her sisters attention. … Continue reading

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