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Lily’s first date 

I’m working on this to add into the story. It’s far from ready or finished but it’s a start. Thought and comments please. I’m open to suggestion for how to continue  He had asked her. She had hoped for so … Continue reading

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New start to chapter 1

Lily’s eyes shot open wide, staring up at her dark pale ceiling. Searching eyes followed the perimeter of the room, scanning through the shadows for the man who ruined her life.  The mostly barren walls were held no sign of … Continue reading

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ReWorking

I just rewrote and slightly changed this part and would love some feedback.     Lily let her thoughts wander to Jade, forgetting to watch her step in doing so and tripped over her own feet and crashed against Wolf … Continue reading

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Play Him Like A Fool Lily

One afternoon Jade asked Lily why she didn’t try to learn in class. Lily had simply replied, “I just don’t care.” He seemed surprised with her response and even a little concerned. “What would you do if you  were attacked?” … Continue reading

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Tension on the roof

Its still really rough, I haven’t edited this far into my book but I love this part.       When both Wolf Vein and Lily both were comfortable leaning next to her window, Lily started the conversation. “Stop staring … Continue reading

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Sister Teasing

I’m trying to build the relationship between Lily and her sister rather than tell it. I would love some opinions on how I am doing.     Plopping herself on her queen size bed, she pulled out her phone and … Continue reading

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When stopping at a gas station screws you

The usual girl was working the counter. Her familiar face was pleasant but the empty look in her eyes made her difficult to read. Lily stood at the counter with her potatoes chips and coke. Is she always that pale? … Continue reading

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