Tag Archives: Editing

New start to chapter 1

Lily’s eyes shot open wide, staring up at her dark pale ceiling. Searching eyes followed the perimeter of the room, scanning through the shadows for the man who ruined her life.  The mostly barren walls were held no sign of … Continue reading

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Playing the Game

The teacher was giving another lesson that Lucifer failed to find the useful. But, Marietta on the other hand, was taking it all in. He had never seen such an organized notebook. Each page was dated and given a title. … Continue reading

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Red flags of manipulation

When the window opened an old man stood behind it, asking for their orders. Chad spoke up first, “I’ll have a chocolate and vanilla swirl. No sprinkles.” He turned to her waiting for her order. “Oh, um, chocolate please.” The … Continue reading

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Marietta Speaks to cats

As she walked along the kitchen cabinets checking for food supplies, the cat stayed in pace with her. Bowls and plates were in the cabinet closest to the refrigerator. The other was filled with drinking glasses and coffee mugs. She … Continue reading

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New Companion

I wanted to use a symbol for Marietta’s father, so of course for the imprisoned Devil I chose a black cat.   The keepers brought her to a small cottage. There was nothing beautiful about this place. Dead plants lined … Continue reading

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Meet the Queen of Angels

When they reached the far side Marietta stopped in front of three large steps. A woman sat in a grand chair on the top step. The keepers took their spots on either side of the stairs and went down on … Continue reading

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Marietta’s apology

I’ve been reworking parts of how Marietta apologizes to Lucifer. I want the way she speaks and how he reacts to better match their characters. “Hey. How’s your head.” Her smile lightened his mood slightly. “It’s alright.” His attitude towards … Continue reading

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